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- Jemima williams
- Username: JemimaW
- Location: Brooklyn, New York
- Joined PRX: Oct 01, 2010
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- "Why Do Kids Drop Out of School?"
- Summary: The KFAI Youth News Initiative creates a platform for young women of color to give their unique perspective on issues they face in their communities.
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Constructive
Jemima williams
Posted on October 15, 2010 at 06:13 PM
hello! I'm making a few updates to my previous comment. I am a member of the Generation PRX Youth Editorial Board. I really enjoyed your piece. It held a great outline. The choosing of this topic was excellent, because this problem is hardly recognized. Oe thing you can work on next time is the clarification of your piece. The diction needs a little work, it sounded pretty scripted. The length of the piece was decent, bt try to get more interviews. There are three experts heard on this document, but only one who experienced it. Otherwise, this piece was highly productive. Good Job!