i think this piece is hilarious and there are so many stories involved with driving and first times driving. nice diversity of voices.
those levels aren't too hard to fix. watch your levels as you're editing, instead of going by your ears. you can even turn the sound off and just make they're consistent. also, new bit of criticism, slow down a bit while reading. cause your writing is smart and you swallow some of your best lines.
i love when the music cuts out as the guy gets a speeding ticket! good comic timing.
David's voicing is somber, straightforward, and engaging. It is important to hear a teen mother speaking candidly as she goes through her day. I would like to see response pieces from other areas in the country. Makes me wodner: How do other public school systems handle students with children? Is Meyia privileged to have this program, or is this the norm?
A tightly edited and written portrait, but the tone is a little PSA sounding, since there is more telling than "showing."
Haha! Did Claire make you do this a penance for drinking so much soda, Libby? Great outrage/sarcasm/annoyance. Easy to listen to and informative essay.
Using this on Youthcast! I love that you contradict yourself through your brother, blaming the energy comsumption in the house on him, and then having him turn it around on you. It's a "lesson learned" piece, without being too heavy handed about the importance of self-awareness. Sound rich!
Comments by Molly Adams
Comment for "The power of plastic!"
Molly Adams
Posted on June 14, 2010 at 11:07 AM | Permalink
levels
i think this piece is hilarious and there are so many stories involved with driving and first times driving. nice diversity of voices.
those levels aren't too hard to fix. watch your levels as you're editing, instead of going by your ears. you can even turn the sound off and just make they're consistent. also, new bit of criticism, slow down a bit while reading. cause your writing is smart and you swallow some of your best lines.
i love when the music cuts out as the guy gets a speeding ticket! good comic timing.
Comment for "Teen Mother's"
Molly Adams
Posted on July 19, 2009 at 05:37 PM | Permalink
Review
David's voicing is somber, straightforward, and engaging. It is important to hear a teen mother speaking candidly as she goes through her day. I would like to see response pieces from other areas in the country. Makes me wodner: How do other public school systems handle students with children? Is Meyia privileged to have this program, or is this the norm?
A tightly edited and written portrait, but the tone is a little PSA sounding, since there is more telling than "showing."
Comment for "High Fructose Corn Syrup in the Environment"
Molly Adams
Posted on June 25, 2009 at 02:36 PM | Permalink
Soda Habit
Haha! Did Claire make you do this a penance for drinking so much soda, Libby? Great outrage/sarcasm/annoyance. Easy to listen to and informative essay.
Comment for "Energy Brat"
Molly Adams
Posted on June 25, 2009 at 01:56 PM | Permalink
Youthcast Selection!
Using this on Youthcast! I love that you contradict yourself through your brother, blaming the energy comsumption in the house on him, and then having him turn it around on you. It's a "lesson learned" piece, without being too heavy handed about the importance of self-awareness. Sound rich!
Comment for "Goddaddyo"
Molly Adams
Posted on June 23, 2009 at 05:13 PM | Permalink
My Thoughts
Sometimes it's hard to understand what the speaker is saying, but the sounds and rhythm and the words that do pop, leave me with a wary feeling.