However, while I can clearly understand A's concerns with the American marketing schemes taking advantage of the green movement (and her annoyance of color mix-ups), this piece is hardly grounded in fact. A repeatedly spouts statistics such as saying that biking, shorter showers and composting "do 10 times more for the planet". I think this story would hold much more merit if these facts could be linked to research or if A included the voices of experts into her piece. In addition, I believe some listeners may take offense when their "green" intentions and actions are diminished- which I don't believe is A's goal in creating this piece. Because in essence, people are taking baby steps towards reducing climate change and bringing a reusable bag to the grocery store is something people can do without dramatically changing their lifestyles. When constructing a piece such as this, I believe it is necessary to dig in a little deeper than an initial feeling of disgust towards someone with a blue shopping bag.
I applause A on her ending which is an excellent culmination and addresses the listeners kindly.
The piece was on topic. I feel that a little bit more emotion added to your tone? Going green is something more serious that we need to do. One act of making an effort to go green can make a big difference. Good job on the piece though. I would also suggest setting the mode and tone in the intro, as well as the outro, But once again great job.
Hello! My name is Jemima, and I am a member of the Generation PRX Youth Editorial Board. First I would like to congradulate you on completing this piece. I like this idea of choosing this topic. The diction was clear. I would suggest music to begin your piece the same way it is used to end the piece. Otherwise this piece was great. Good Job!
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Aviva Hirsch
Posted on April 12, 2011 at 08:24 PM | Permalink
Constructive Criticism
The voicing and diction of this piece is great.
However, while I can clearly understand A's concerns with the American marketing schemes taking advantage of the green movement (and her annoyance of color mix-ups), this piece is hardly grounded in fact. A repeatedly spouts statistics such as saying that biking, shorter showers and composting "do 10 times more for the planet". I think this story would hold much more merit if these facts could be linked to research or if A included the voices of experts into her piece. In addition, I believe some listeners may take offense when their "green" intentions and actions are diminished- which I don't believe is A's goal in creating this piece. Because in essence, people are taking baby steps towards reducing climate change and bringing a reusable bag to the grocery store is something people can do without dramatically changing their lifestyles. When constructing a piece such as this, I believe it is necessary to dig in a little deeper than an initial feeling of disgust towards someone with a blue shopping bag.
I applause A on her ending which is an excellent culmination and addresses the listeners kindly.
Darin Johnson
Posted on March 30, 2011 at 07:05 PM | Permalink
Hopi High School
The piece was on topic. I feel that a little bit more emotion added to your tone? Going green is something more serious that we need to do. One act of making an effort to go green can make a big difference. Good job on the piece though. I would also suggest setting the mode and tone in the intro, as well as the outro, But once again great job.
Jemima williams
Posted on November 17, 2010 at 06:33 PM | Permalink
Constructive
Hello! My name is Jemima, and I am a member of the Generation PRX Youth Editorial Board. First I would like to congradulate you on completing this piece. I like this idea of choosing this topic. The diction was clear. I would suggest music to begin your piece the same way it is used to end the piece. Otherwise this piece was great. Good Job!